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Some people believe that technology has made the lives of workers easier whilst other people disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is an irrefutable fact that
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 has brought numerous changes in all the field. It is believed by some that It has a great contribution to make life better and easy for employees. I agree with
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, People who in the favour of the
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 assert that due to the new gadgets workers have to do less physical work.
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, Often in construction sites before the availability of current heavy machinery, people do not have any other option for load or unload them heavy concrete but machinery solve
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 problem with the innovation of big machine.
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, As the viewpoint of factory workers, It saves lots of time and money because the advancement in the
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 the production of goods increasing at rapid growth and help to save individuals precious time. To cite an example, Before the invention of robots companies always use a huge number of human's to install or set up any big types of equipment which take extra time and money. So,
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 has brought new methods with the help to various tools which can do these type of dangerous works.
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, Each coin has two sides. So, people cannot deny the dark side of
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 because it's eating lots of jobs.
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, many big car companies using computers or programming robot or cranes in the production line, which leads to unemployment in
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society. To conclude, I would like to state that there are both sides of an above-said question.
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, If I have to choose one, I can say that the advantages of
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 overweight the disadvantages. So, I favour it.
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