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volunteering should be made part of the school curriculum do you agree or disagree

#part #school #curriculum
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ssential part of high school schooling.
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, being a volunteer, which tends to charity events. I totally agree with
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I would like to recount for what reason it could
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 students.
Firstly
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 charity participating aids
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adolescents
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 to affect to not only to younger people,
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 it extends to remedy whole society, due to the fact that matured former youngsters that
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 attended to volunteering mostly had more sense of responsibility.
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, nowadays we literally appear to lack of volunteers to do community services. There are lots of benefits which would assist to change social
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. Even from my infinitesimal experience
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I might say that I perceived proud about myself after our eco-projects which was about to cultivate 25 trees in our school. In conclusion, I would like to say attending students to wageless community services is truly
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reat schooling part and we must make it compulsory.
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