With the increasing demand for energy sources of oil and gas, people should look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of damaging such areas?

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Because of the growing human population,

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oil and gas is increasing and humans

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attempt

to move into untouched natural places

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as forest where a thousand animals live. I think that

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human's actions have a bad and serious effect on pollution which has an important relation to human, and animals and plants

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living creatures

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as vegetations and animals. Since nineteen's century, a lot of species of animals have

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because of the industrial revolution. So, we can say that people don't care about

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living creatures for their good or to be

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more important and valuable than

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the world and they need to quit to fell trees or make another catastrophe. Looking for sources has a strong and negative effect on other living creatures lives.

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human's

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condition. Previously, people used to able to drink

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because it used to be clean, but now sixty

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is too dirty and harmful to cook or drink. Probably, in ten years, people may

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life

harder day by day. To conclude, when we look at the living creatures' lives, looking for fuel has an extraordinary negative effect.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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