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Some people think university education should be free to everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #university #education
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It has been suggested that college students should be enrolled without fees so that each citizen has opportunities to attend
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 ,in my opinion, non-charging is not realistic and rational as it can put a huge burden on
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governmental budget that comes from taxer. Students may be affected negatively as well.
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 of all, most subjects like physics, chemistry and biology require a large amount of investment to purchase advanced equipment and experimental materials that are cost. They are vital and necessary
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 education serve to educate students with
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nowledge and
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 skills rather than simply award them diplomas.
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, free of charge may encourage too many people to entre
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. It would lead to
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 staff shortage, no matter administrators or researchers, which means that there would not be enough experienced teachers educating their students. Students may be not able to study deeply and practice enough time without long-term guidance from professional supervisors and appropriate equipment.
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, students who attend
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 but do not need to pay any money may take it for granted.
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 is to say, they may not view their courses, assignments and teamwork seriously. In the end, they would fail their exam and perform badly in their academic performance. It is not only a waste of governmental expense but
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 their own precise time. In conclusion, I disagree with the point of view that
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 students should not be charged as it will have
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negative impact on
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country financial system and students themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university education
  • higher pay
  • sweated and sacrificed
  • higher education
  • time, effort, and financial investment
  • specialized knowledge and skills
  • job prospects
  • economic contributions
  • valuable contributions
  • fairness and equality
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