People try new dangerous sports such as sky-diving or rock climbing. Should such sports be banned?

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In recent years we have seen a considerable rise in dangerous or extreme

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I do not support an outright ban on

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, I do feel that the government should regulate

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so that they are played under supervision which will minimize the risks. It is irrefutable that dangerous or extreme

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can cause injury or even death to

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individuals.

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, banning

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is not the answer.

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, the government should ensure that the companies or centres which provide the facilities for

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should meet the required, legal safety standards. Another argument against banning is that

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people would play them in hiding and

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they would be even more risky. After

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we all know that forbidden fruits taste sweeter.

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, if

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bans

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, it could be viewed as an infringement of the rights. Those who choose to participate in these

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know the consequences. They know very well what is good or bad for them. They argue that if

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are banned,

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all those other things that are harmful

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individuals should be banned like smoking, drinking and eating fast foods. What is more, those sportsmen who excel in

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bring name and fame to their country. They break records set by others and when they do so, the name of their country shines in the whole world. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that,

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should be performed after sufficient training and under

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the supervision

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of adults. Dangerous

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companies should require a license

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training. To lay a ban on

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is not the answer.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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277 words

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