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The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that the original meaning of family dining has been no longer forgotten as the new generation tend to move with their jobs and take ready meals outside. I think that
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 trend weakened the family bonds within the community.
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, nowadays fewer families are likely to have dinners together because all the family members became busier than the family members were in the past. Young adults, in fact, prefer to buy their lunches and eat them far away from home, so it is not surprising that family dinners are real rarety nowadays. My father,
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, work really hard these days, so he barely can eat with us even after completing one's work.
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, in
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 age and day, there are a number of families, which gather in special occasions like Christmas and Thanksgiving, whereas in simple days they could hardly connect with their extended families because of lack of time.
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, it is important that modern families try to preserve their ties and rapport between its members.
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, the reality is that society is awfully affected by
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 negative trend as well. Continually a great number of nuclear families are crushed because of disagreements between married couples and, unfortunately, the children are more likely to be mentally injured and pressured because of the increasing number of divorces in some countries.
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, more wives complain because of the absence of their husbands in their lives.
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, skipping family dinners may be accounted for as a reason for couples to drift apart.
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, breadwinners take a great responsibility to take care of family and its welfare,
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, they are able to miss family dinners in order to earn money. To conclude,
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 the family meals have a pivotal role to play on families, I think that it is unreal if not impossible to dine together every day.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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