Most newspapers today publish more advertisements than concrete news, unlike in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development?

These days advertisement has been given more importance than news in the newspaper. In my opinion, news plays a major role in the development of
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ountry and by publishing
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commercials are deviating the importance of the news that needs to be brought in to the
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negative impact on the development of the
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ajor role for the companies to showcase their products in the form of advertising. It is the one way of attracting buyers for the products.
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, most of the time the products are been misleading to the consumers, and the huge investment is involved in publishing the advertisement in the newspaper, which has
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ead cost of the product has been increased tremendously.
For instance
, Commercials related to air-conditioning had additional features, whereas when people bought the product it led to the disappointment to them.
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of the people are unaware of the recent developments in the
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as publishers are reluctant to publish the news which is important for the
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. Some companies can create
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onopoly in the newspapers by publishing the same advertisement, and it is possible to dilute the news with the help of power. Sometimes it becomes very difficult to compete with the concrete news. Most of the time just for the sake of selling the products the companies will
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publish fake news which misleads the people. In Conclusion, Advertisement most of
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ime is published to attract the consumers , and huge investments are involved which dilutes the news.
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some investors and the cost of the product has been increased which makes
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ifficult for the people to believe
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