“Prevention is better than cure” Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

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We are living in an era of deadly and chronic diseases.
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we are currently witnessing the most advanced era of medical science in the history of mankind, still researching and treating every single disease is not practical given the costs involved in the process, and
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, it would be better to invest in preventative measures
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investing in the
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of the diseases. Developing a
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for disease involved rigorous medical science
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and treatment which are expensive. Many-if not the most- countries and communities in the world are not economically sustainable to fund the required large amount of money.
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, despite the fact that Bangladesh is a middle-income nation, it would be challenging to ensure COVID 19 vaccination for the entire population of the country during
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pandemic.
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to
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, some chronic diseases
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cancer and diabetes need life-long support. Public healthcare funded by the governments would find it difficult to conduct
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or borrow
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findings from other countries or giant pharmaceuticals companies and support patients with critical health conditions due to the limitation of resources and prioritise investing heavily on healthcare over other financial sectors. Seeking
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ure for diseases,
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, is not feasible for the nations.
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many will argue that not all diseases are preventable and there would always be diseases that will need
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ure. It is true that not all diseases are preventable. In the same vein, not all diseases are curable. It is important to initiate preventive measures for the diseases as the
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line of defence against them. It will allow
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the spread of many diseases. Given the circumstances explained above, prevention of diseases, if possible, would be a pragmatic measure to tackle
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roblem. Especially, outbreaks contagious diseases,
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as HIV and other viral diseases which do not have any
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, are almost impossible to confine.
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, many chronic diseases are a threat to public health, which are not easy to treat, and
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need life-long support, could be tackled more effectively by preventive measures
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as lifestyle modifications, awareness buildings and at times enforcing
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aw (e.g., imposing fine on smoking in public places; high tax on sugar production). These preventive measures could be more effective to improve the public health situation more. As the saying goes “prevention is better than
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” is practical when it comes down to treating diseases where expensive
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and treatments involved in the process and given the limitation of resources that many nations face today.
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, government(s) should focus more on taking initiatives to take preventive measures rather than seeking
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ure for all diseases.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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