Many Teenagers now have their own smartphone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion

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phones very much recently and it is the trend. I am in my opinion, there is both useful and useless
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spreading knowledge. Aforetime, a juvenile has been limited in their studies.
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, they assigned themselves only reading in papers. Not only that their wisdom was restricted in a certain area. Another advantage
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mobile phone they
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to take information about
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information which lead them to go ahead of any aspects. They were keen to develop any
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. From my perspective, when a person attempts to use a smartphone he would take those type of knowledge which was very availed in their daily life experience.
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anywhere and anytime. Using a mobile dial which consists of a fully
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system enables them to implement various types of
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which would be fruitful
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them.
On the contrary
, the frequent use of smartphones creates addiction. Juvenile uses mobile phones many times which spoil their study time.
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their health. In my opinion, as using
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phone kill their additional
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they do not get
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period to do any exercises.
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, it creates a lot of drawbacks
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their health.
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mobile contact
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weight very much which leads
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diseases. Even, they face death in the final stage. In conclusion, a smartphone is
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source of knowledge to upgrade ones.
However
, frequent using of mobile contact is not welfare for the nations. I would say
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should be used but in a balanced way so that
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would not create any harm.
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