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Online shopping is now replacing shopping in store. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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If you had a chance to interview people’s shopping style today, more than 90% will tell you that they shop online. Even though some people might view
this
 phenomenon negatively, I believe the advantages of shopping via internet out weight the disadvantages. Let’s
firstly
 look at some of the disadvantages of buying things online. Some environmentalists might argue that shopping online brings more pressure on our environment by producing more packaging stuffs.
However
, even though you go shopping in the store, the packaging problem is still there. Even worse, when you shop in a physical store, you travel there by driving your cars, emitting more exhausted fumes, and defeating the whole idea of conserving energy.
In contrast
, shopping online is a lot more economical from the perspective of time and money. Previously, it took hours for people to do shopping: traveling to the shop, finding things you need, and
then
 waiting in a long line for checking out, whereas now, you just need to scroll and click with your mouse at home to get items, and
then
 wait for the deliver-man to come, bringing you the goods. It saves people huge amount of time with which you can actually spend with your families and doing something more constructive, like building up the relationship with your kids or simply just talking with your spouse.
Further
 more, financial benefit is another attractive trait for online shoppers. According to a economic report released recently on the figures on prices, it’s averagely 20% cheaper for a particular item bought online than from the supermarket. No wonder people prefer buy things via internet. In a word, with few negative effects, buying goods on the internet is still developing in a dramatic high rate. And I
also
 believe it will continue to enjoy the stunning popularity in the future.
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