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Online shopping is now replacing shopping in store. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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The e-commerce industry is the fast-growing area in today's' age
however
 online shopping is a part of that. Because of online shopping, In-store shopping is no longer in demand.
This
 essay will discuss why online shopping is replacing shopping in shopping.
First
 of all, the strongest point to prove my point is that there is an uncountable variety available on
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nternet.
For example
, you can find lots of a different kind of option if someone wants to buy a T-shirt. And the main attractive thing is that you can find everything on one platform. Whereas in-store. you have to choose from their inventory.
Furthermore
, there is a bunch of promotions available on internet shopping rather than physical shopping.
Second
 of all, nowadays people are very busy in their daily chor and they do not have enough time to go to the store and buy something especially in-store operating hours.
Instead
 of that, they can buy anything anywhere from the internet. One clear example,
last
 month I was looking for a car wheel rim cover. I spent almost three to four days to search a different kind of rim covers but I did not find any proper compare to online. And, IN
last
,I bought that online with more options and cheaper compare to store. On the other side, some of us believe that support local rather than globally. They believe that online shopping creating unemployment and people are getting lazy day by day because of web shopping. To sum up, there are no limit advantages compare to some negligible disadvantages. I personally think that online shopping is
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otally positive development in today's age and for the future.
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