Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Online shopping has become a recent trend in the 21st
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internet and marketing for internet shopping and marketing for internet shopping is becoming more popular in the generation. People prefer shopping online because they save time and more convenient. Though some people find it difficult to use online shopping, most of
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nline company focus on improving profit
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of bringing actual solutions to increase
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customber
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customer
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service
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, in online shopping
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customber
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customer
feed back
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has a great effect on the purchase of the
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, when a person
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to buy a mobile phone through any online platform search for the review of the
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quality. When the
product
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have
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negative comments will alternatively affect the
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customber
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customer
decision to buy the
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. Another problem faced by purchasers
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providing proper guidelines of how the website works.
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, an elderly person booking online train tickets find it difficult to understand
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teps involved in
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rocess. To overcome
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, the company which maintain the online services must focus on improving
product
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standard according to the
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customber
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customer
recommendation. Rather than providing
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unequality
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inequality
product
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with discounts and refund.
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, a tutorial video of how the website works must be attached to every online platform, which might be helpful for new users.
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, though
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online shopping has its own advantages. It is important for the company to focus and work on
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alternatives
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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