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Individual should take care of the environment or it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#care #environment #government’s #responsibility
In
this
 modern world. where people are so busy to make themselves better in society, there they totally forgot to keep safe the
environment
. Some people think that
this
 is the only
government
 responsibility and some said that individual should think themselves about how to safe the
environment
.
Discussion
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ext paragraphs with my opinion. On the side of the individual, they should start taking care of
this
environment
 by themselves because
this
nature
 gives a lot
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of
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things to human and person's responsibility to keep safe their society with growing more trees or fewer
use
 woods or furniture products
for instance
, in most of the countries human make their homes with wood and they
also
use
 another furniture things like wooden kitchens and or wooden almirahs or even they
also
 the
use
 a piece of wood in luxurious cars to look more attractive,which we do not need in cars.
Secondly
, people can less
use
 of their personal vehicles because if they reduce the number of cars in society
then
 they can safe the
environment
 to spreading more air pollution. On the other side, the
government
 is
also
 responsible to take care of
nature
 if they would make some strict laws like produce only recyclable things or stop to produce the plastic bags or water bottles because of
this
 they can stop the pollution. The
government
 should make awareness camps to aware
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their social people to safe
nature
 and or they can make a different budget to make a better
environment
. In the end, both the individual and the
government
 should understand their responsibilities and work together to safe
nature
. If the
environment
 is healthy,
then
 the human will grow more with the new generation.
Submitted by Simranjeet Singh on

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