Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Most of the individuals believe that, if the
person
is wealthy
then
it gives that
person
an opportunity to help poor. I completely agree on
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point and I will be highlighting the point to support my above statement.
To begin
with,
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are many rich people in the country who are supporting
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families and poor families in the form of donations .Few of them do it for getting benefit on taxes in return they get publicity and name.
For example
, Azim Premji makes donations from his salary and spend most of the time in helping people. When the
person
is in
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higher position and money it becomes very important to make
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charities
charity
because they earn
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ood amount of salary so that contributing a little will not make any difference to them.
Secondly
,
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are many institutes which have been supported by
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famous celebrities. They
also
provide shelter and food to the people.
For instance
, Sudha Murthy is a well-known celebrity, who helps the needy , and she is been well known for her selfless contribution.
Additionally
, it becomes a responsibility of the Government to check , if the proper support is been reached to the people. It is not necessary to help in terms of money ,it can be by providing education, house to the people. Even the government can play
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major role, by providing the
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guidelines
guideline
that if there is any major contribution done there will tax concession , which contributes
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more donations. In
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conclusion
, It is very important for making donations and helping people for the progress of the country. It can be in terms of monetary or emotionally. There are people who
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help others but it becomes a very basic and human necessity to help
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another person
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person
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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