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Children from age 7-11 now spend more time watching television and/or playing vedio games than before. What are the effects of this on children, families and society? What are the possible solutions to this problems?

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Nowadays, Kids from early adolescence age are devoting their majority of the time in playing
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 games on children are lower social skills and depression as well in critical cases. Gaming genres like virtual reality and the
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,excessive usage results in reduced attention span and short-tempered behaviour.
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,according to a recently published report on psychotic cases, there is a surge in the number of cases in children predominantly under the age of ten years.
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 games and television tend to be more introvert and less connected with their loved ones. In-game purchases like weapons or other added utilities are
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umber of juvenile theft cases solely for the reason of purchasing in-game utilities.
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, early diagnosis of the problem can help in reversing of the symptoms. Indulging kids in physical activities in early-stage and providing social support will be helpful to tackle the cause. To illustrate, activities like friends gatherings or sleepovers, group activities and many more will act as a tool to diversify the kids' attention to varied activities and not only on a few things To conclude, In recent times adolescents are spending extra time on
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 games and television as compared to past. Timely identification and dealing with the issue will be beneficial for child, family and society

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