The growth of online shopping one day will lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

The tendency to shopping online
have
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been already
incresing
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increasing
in the
last
decade. The
practically
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is the reason for people is looking it even more.
Although
in Brazil we have some logistic problems to
delivery
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some goods, the
purchease
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purchase
increase as
wellas
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well as
in countries which started with
this
practice
firstly
.
Furthermore
, is easier to
seach
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search
for great promotions and make some comparations with
another websites
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.
However
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the confidence has to be one of the most important
thing
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we should have and keep
the
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client loyalty.
Nowdays
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is easier to interact with
potencial
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potential
guests and improve
therelantionship
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the relationship
through some software like Costumer
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Relationship
Management. Shopping online won’t make the local shopping close,
obiously
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obviously
, the strategies have to change to better to keep them open. Due to the pandemic causing bankruptcy in
alot
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a lot
of stores the same brand made it possible to go on with the sales
through
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online. We can use as
exemple
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example
Best Buy who continue increasing even though the empire of Amazon. In my point of view, people simply love to spend
the
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time inside malls. The experience is different comparing just shopping online. Usually
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people prefer to try on clothes to see if that one suit of
their
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theirs
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. We’ve
been already spend
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been already spending
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too much time online, the simple fact to shopping online
is being boring
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is being bored
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therefore
some people prefer shopping at the mall.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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