Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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eason why people
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that zoos it’s good for
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we have enough
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of good zoos that can protect some
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that can help to recreate
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in
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On the other hand
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surviwing
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surviving
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species
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in
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irst time. Many
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said, that people
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intervention
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terrible aftermath for animals. According to the
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ustralian Zoo Association, over
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30% of animals can’t survive and died in wildlife, after being in
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more than one year. In
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want to say. For some
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species
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this
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help them to survive and
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implement
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conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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