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Write about the following topic. A person’s health is their own responsibility rather than the government’s responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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It is true that the
government
 has some important responsibilities.
However
, I believe a person's
health
 is not one of them and I think people should care about their own physical and mental condition.
This
 essay will present arguments to support my opinion.
To begin
 with, I believe people have to take responsibility for their own
health
. It is a common thought that the authorities should provide everything to citizens,
nevertheless
,there are some aspects
that is
 not
government
's role and
health
 is one of them. So, people should maintain a healthy routine to achieve a better condition.
For example
, strength training is one of the best exercises to our body according to some researchers and I believe it is people's duty to do
such
 exercise on a regular basis. Unfortunately, we do not see any move from authorities to explain people the importance of
p
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hysical activity to reach better
health
.
Furthermore
, I believe that the
government
 cannot make people healthier.
In other words
, the only thing that governors provide for citizens is the treatment of some diseases,
however
,they do not provide the path to improve physical, social and mental
health
. To illustrate, Brazil's public
health
 system is totally designed to help people in extreme conditions rather than helping them to not reach
such
 conditions. To sum up, I believe people should be more worried about their own well-being
instead
 of saying that
this
 is the
government
's responsibility. They could start by practising some physical exercises
such
 as strength training and jogging.
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