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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Nowadays many people start their own firm rather than joining
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a company because in personal
business
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 there is
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complete freedom to
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 and there are several other reasons to consider.
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,
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 leads to many risks that affect individuals in
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arious way. In
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 will give the reasons, why many people are likely to build their own brand and its consequences. At present, it is difficult to acquire high paid jobs, and some organisation requires
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 academic degree or higher education for a particular
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, due to
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this people
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 with low grades or without graduation certificate are not eligible for the company.
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, more people want to get rich in
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hort period of
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thus
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 they start their
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 which can lead to success in
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hort
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.
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, a
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 can give a huge amount of money and a person get successful and
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 is not possible in salaried jobs. Another reason for people to get
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 in
self employment
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self-employment
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 is, some individuals can not
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 in
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ressure of organisation and
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work load
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 while
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 gives them freedom of
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 and they are the
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decision
 makers of their own startup.
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, there are several disadvantages like
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 being self-employed is a great risk it may
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 to
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uge loss of money and there is no guarantee of success. Whereas, in
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alaried job
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there is
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assurance of paycheck at end of the month.
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, people in their own
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works
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 hard day and night to gain achievement and they do not spend
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 with family.
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,
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self
help
-employed may not keep
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alance between
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 life and personal life and it will
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 them mentally and emotionally. For illustration, to
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 in
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orgainsation
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organisation
 there is a working hours and employees
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 on those hours and complete there task by late evening and afterwards they spend
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 with their closed ones whereas, in self-
employement
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employment
 as there is no
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 limitation, people do 24 hours
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 to lift up their
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. In conclusion, there is no denying that self-
employement
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employment
 gives reliability and liberty but it is evident that, people should have
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b
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usiness knowledge to gain money and
work
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 with proper
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 management to achieve success.
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, it can
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leads
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 to some critical issues which will affect them and sometimes their families too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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