In some countries, prison is seen as the solution to crime. However, some people believe that giving people a better education is a better way to prevent them from committing crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these ideas? Give your opinions based on your knowledge and experience.

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eclining crime rate have become controversial around the world. Some people argue that the

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of prison in our society would prevent the growing culprit proportion, while I strongly agree with another manner that providing the quality education for citizens would solve the suggested issue. Following are the reasons why I am in

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with, more importantly, the giving programs about the demerits of committing

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rime could revise the public’s fundamental

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involved the concrete description about how people have to pay

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ee or why people can not stand their job after conducting crimes. For most Korean school example, the entire

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schools have executed these projects with local polices for preventing juvenile crime annually. As the result, the kiddy lawbreaker percentage had decreased over 30% than in the past.

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, for losing potential criminals, these classes would be necessary

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our community. On top of that, establishing the high quality of

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ducational system,

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as academical, productive, and technological subjects

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would be more beneficial in the

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situation.

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onsequent, when the citizens, who had received those studies, started economy activities and

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the free-market demand will active the increase in rapidly. While prison had cost-ineffective for maintaining the architectures and managing criminals.

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what I have been mentioned above as well. To sum up, the appropriate educations are the positive policy with not only reducing offender ratio but

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promoting the country’s

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situation.

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, it is desirable for the local governments and relevant educational institutions should order new initiative as effective the learning programs.