Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Several people think that things are made by technology, are
b
Add an article
the
a
show examples
ad result that people decrease talking in society. From my point of view, I strongly agree that hi-tech products are made people do not interested to talk with other people. Presently, many countries around the world, create new technological items every day. There are many companies that design electronic
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
show examples
.
In stance
Correct your spelling
Instance
show examples
, Apple,
Sumsung
Correct your spelling
Samsung
and Oppo, so all of these
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
show examples
make people ignore their social and people who talk with them.
However
Linking Words
, some people believe that there are not reasons why
that
Remove the determiner
apply
show examples
people less communicate.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the company just create products
for
Verify preposition usage
to
show examples
make people life comfortable.
Lastly
Linking Words
, there are individual people to decided about people want to take with people or not.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, more and more people argue that electronic items have an
Replace the word
effect
show examples
affect
Correct your spelling
effect
show examples
on people.
Firstly
Linking Words
, some people both addict to play games and talk with people on the internet.
Secondly
Linking Words
, it makes their habit change.
In stance
Correct your spelling
Instance
show examples
, some children are kind, happy and polite, but when they use technological items a lot,
they
Change the pronoun
their
show examples
mode are change to unpolite and angry, so children will be bad guys.
Last
Linking Words
but not least, it is not only become estranged for other people but
also
Linking Words
in their family too. These are
r
Add an article
the
show examples
easons why
that
Remove the determiner
apply
show examples
they agree with
this
Linking Words
cause. To sum up,
nowaday
Correct your spelling
nowadays
show examples
, there are a lot of high-tech
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
show examples
that companies design.
However
Linking Words
, it makes people become to ignore to talk with people in the public and I agree that all of
i
Add an article
the
show examples
nventions are made people terrible.
Submitted by thanaruporn.1 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: