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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive.

#people #inventions #phones
Several people think that things are made by technology, are
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ad result that people decrease talking in society. From my point of view, I strongly agree that hi-tech products are made people do not interested to talk with other people. Presently, many countries around the world, create new technological items every day. There are many companies that design electronic
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, Apple,
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Samsung
 and Oppo, so all of these
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 make people ignore their social and people who talk with them.
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, some people believe that there are not reasons why
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people less communicate.
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, the company just create products
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 make people life comfortable.
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, there are individual people to decided about people want to take with people or not.
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, more and more people argue that electronic items have an
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 on people.
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, some people both addict to play games and talk with people on the internet.
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, it makes their habit change.
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, some children are kind, happy and polite, but when they use technological items a lot,
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 mode are change to unpolite and angry, so children will be bad guys.
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easons why
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they agree with
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 cause. To sum up,
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, there are a lot of high-tech
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 that companies design.
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, it makes people become to ignore to talk with people in the public and I agree that all of
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nventions are made people terrible.
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