some people say that music is a good way to bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There are many genres of
music
representing their traditional identity and country people. Some people believe that
music
is a good way to unite humans from different cultures and age group. I agree with
this
opinion to a great extent. I will support my stand with valid arguments in the following paragraphs. Nowadays, individuals are not only interested in their own cultural songs but they are fascinated towards other genres
such
pop, hip hop, contemporary these are some most famous types of
music
people of different age listen to.
Furthermore
, international fans of
music
bands
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or artist are now easily meet up with each on
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nline platform and discuss their opinion and suggest their cultural
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For example
, world concerts like Tomorrowland held every year in Las Vegas, where people from different community and cultural background come and listen to international and national
music
as well as meet with new people with same
music
taste.
On the other hand
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music
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rtist sometimes doesn't know the exact value of cultural song and they may lead to disrespect the ethics of
music
.
For example
, Chinese
music
is famous in China, Japan and Korea, no doubt all these songs are available on
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nternet, people listen to
this
and cannot understand the actual meaning
although
they just go through the lyrics without knowing the proper accent and traditional value.
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will create differences in people from
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ifferent country. In conclusion, there is no denying that less knowledge about
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pecific song can generate misunderstanding between people and
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cultural, but it is evident that
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music
can merge different societies from its songs, concerts and live performance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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