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“Prevention is better than cure” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#“prevention #cure” #country’s #health #budget #proportion #treatment #education #prevention #measures
The world has been suffering from many challenges .
This
 will lead
a health problems
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.Some people opine that authorities should spend a large number of
money
 to the
awareness
 of fitness and precautionary
stpes
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steps
. I strongly agree with
this
 view.
This
eassy
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easy
 will discuss my stance with
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arguments
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elow paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the
predominent
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predominant
 reason
on
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to give the importance to the precautionary, as
this
 will help the people to maintain their body.
As using
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money
 on
awareness
 program will create a number of ideas in society. As many people can avoid sickness and can take measurable steps at
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irst stage.
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,
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people can utilize their
money
 on other important things
such
 as education and food.
Although
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this
 will change the living standard of many people, they will give more dedication to their work.
For instance
, in the past , people can not focus
in
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 their work as having sick members in their
familes
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families
,due to
this
 they are having mental stress.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
, spending
money
 to avoid diseases is
realese
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release
 the people to their pain. As having
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llness, it will affect the person and their families mentally and emotionally. But
this
 can avoid by raising
awareness
 about precautions and taking measurable
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steps
 for
an individuals
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individuals
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.
For example
,
g
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overnment gives many types of vaccines for
new born
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newborn
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 babies to prevent
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diseases. In conclusion, as per my opinion, raising
awareness
 about precautions can help a big nation as well as an individual. It helps to build a healthy community and one can grow their development.
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