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Some people think that the best way to learn about business is to study a course at college or university. Others believe that there are other better ways to learn about business. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people believe that academic institutions are the better path to understanding the nuance of
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the rest of them feels that it could be in different ways as well.
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 way of learning the
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 a person's future.
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, some people think that understanding
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 method and they are tested through times,
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many billionaires from the
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, getting knowledge through institutions gives students many use cases of successful ventures from the past, which in turn reduces the investment of time and money in bad ideas by the budding entrepreneurs. As per
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usiness insider, only eighteen
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 of
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 venture became successful in the
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, others feel that learning
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 practically has its own charms. When someone
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 along with an established mentor the chances of understanding the
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 concepts much higher than of theoretical understanding. A study states that many successful
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, the perk of learning by work is that we can earn
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onthly income
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 of paying heavy fees for college which
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 increases the self-confidence. To conclude, both sides have their pros and cons, though in my opinion understanding
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 insights through practical work overweighs learning through a college or university education.
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