Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days actors/actress are well known for their appearance and money but not for

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accomplishment of their goals.

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portrays poor instances to

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generation. I agree to some extent more or less because there are

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some people who got their trophies for their achievements.

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with, people these days are mostly attracted to the beautiful faces of film actors/actress with lots of makeup. The other one would be money, which highlights them where ever they go to but not for their achievements because nowadays, youngsters are attracted to their amazing features which they build up but not for their hard work. But if any movie star gets a trophy, they are not that much identified as winners but are interested in their looks.

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gives very bad messages to society. On the flip side, we

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have great divas who are recognized for their performances. Some of the stars put their lives to make a film succeed.

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, Janaki Garu who was the great actress was recognized as an all-time favourite heroine because of receiving numerous awards. These kinds of people

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the best instances for the current generation. There are

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some individuals who are appreciated for their presentation. To wrap up, I can say that not everyone is spotted out only for their charming faces and not only for the luxurious lives they live

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there are few people who admire them for their work and their attainments.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

246 words

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lifestyles
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promoting
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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You are about to move to an English-speaking country to study. You have a friend living there and you want to find a part-time job. Write a letter to your friend - Explaining your scholar plans, - Your reasons to get a part-time job, - Suggest how he/she can help you finding a job.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre.