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International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. Are the problems that international travellers cause greater than the advantages they bring?

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International
tourism
 has significantly increased among people and becomes a huge industry in the world as it has
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reat hand in
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ountry's economic growth. Whereas, international travellers bring some problems with them as they visit different places. In my opinion, the problems of
this
 practice outweigh the advantages. On the one hand, international
tourism
 contributes a huge amount to the economic growth of the country.
Although
 travelling to different cities, people start knowing
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ultures of that
place
 and develop social skills while interacting with the local community.
Thus
, by exploring places and maintain a healthy relationship will reduce country conflicts. For illustration, president of America and prime minister of India, visit each other's nation to form a relationship between them, while travelling they explore the traditions and culture of the
place
 and give respect to the local people.
On the other hand
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ncrease in
tourism
 will
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tourists travel in groups and it may lead to a traffic of people at a particular
place
.
Moreover
, many times travellers cause great problems
such
 as damaging the monuments, arts and sculptures of the
place
.
For example
, Australia is one of the famous places for beaches, as an increase in tourists will lead to pollution by throwing plastics and rubbish on the beach.
Thus
, the beauty of the
place
 will diminish. In conclusion, there is no denying that
tourism
 brings knowledge of culture and reduces conflicts among people. But, it is evident that the problem they create by their activities will cause serious problems
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 the local people in the future.
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