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We should ban all the advertisement aimed at children due to some negative effects. Agree or disagree?

#ban #advertisement #children #effects
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Recent years,
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 has become more popular and brought lots of effects. Many people think that
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 which targeted at children should be prohibited because of
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dvertisement’s drawbacks. In my opinion, I don’t
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 support. I think
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 some undesirable consequences.
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 of all, If children spend much time on the internet and watch
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dvertisement, they can have sick with their eyes and back.
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, with
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 problem, children could be lazy so they tend to become obese.
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, children are likely to require of their parents that they have to buy items which are showed
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dvertisement.
This
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 could be a bad habit and make parents difficult to teach children.
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, each problem
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 has two sights.
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,
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 is the way of
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ompany’s marketing. It could make brand approach customers easier. By
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, parents are simple to choose
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etter product for their children. All in all,
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dvertisement shouldn’t be
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 too much. Parents should give more ways for children to concentrate on beside
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. If
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 used
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 the right way, it will be useful.
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