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Some schools have restricted the used of mobile phones. Do you think this is a negative development or a positive one?

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Recent years, mobile phones have become more popular and it
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. Many schools have limited using
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. In my opinion, It is necessary for students
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se phones at school. Using mobile phones prevents students from focusing on their lessons. Students have been allowed to
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 they prefer using
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hone all the time and when they are in classes. As a consequence, they would not understand
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, mobile phones help students look up information and relax.
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, when students want to study deeper, they could
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, when students have break time, mobile phones would be a way to help them to relax. They could surf web sites, take photos with their friends, send something funny to their parents,..
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. All in all, students should be allowed
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se at school.
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students should control using mobile phones in classes. If mobile phones are used in the right way, it will be better.
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