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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is Irrefutable that community
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mandatory part of high
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, personally,
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, we should not force
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tudent to do it because it might be counterproductive.
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when someone
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charity
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 because of
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 will only be limited to high
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 pupils because others will depend on them to do it rather than volunteer to do it,
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, it is possible that we will create insufficiency of volunteers when the students who are forced to
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 will never be as willing or loyal as actual volunteers,
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mandatory
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recent research concluded that these programmes have significantly failed so it is better to find people who are truly willing to volunteer. Mandating
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tudent might make them hate the
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 in the future, it is
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human nature that, when
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 is compulsory most people tend to despise it and avoid doing it in the future.
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, a great number of people who volunteer do it because they want to attempt something new
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. To conclude, community service should be part of
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, it should not be mandatory, pupils should opt to apply and
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 or stop working whenever they want.
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