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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is Irrefutable that community
work
 is a crucial part of our lives, some people believe that
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 it should be
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mandatory part of high
school
, personally,
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do
I do
 not deny that
charity
work
 is necessary,
however
, we should not force
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tudent to do it because it might be counterproductive.
Volunteery
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Volunteer
Volunteers
work
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when someone
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charity
 because of
school
 rules
this
work
 will only be limited to high
school
 pupils because others will depend on them to do it rather than volunteer to do it,
therefore
, it is possible that we will create insufficiency of volunteers when the students who are forced to
work
 will never be as willing or loyal as actual volunteers,
for example
, in some countries they put felons with minor crimes in
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mandatory
charity
 programmes,
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recent research concluded that these programmes have significantly failed so it is better to find people who are truly willing to volunteer. Mandating
work
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chool for
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tudent might make them hate the
charity
work
 in the future, it is
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human nature that, when
work
 is compulsory most people tend to despise it and avoid doing it in the future.
Moreover
, a great number of people who volunteer do it because they want to attempt something new
this
 factor will be removed when it is mandated in
school
. To conclude, community service should be part of
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,
nevertheless
, it should not be mandatory, pupils should opt to apply and
work
 or stop working whenever they want.
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