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Some say that people should continue to work in the same job for a lifetime, while others say they should change the job at least once in their career. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people argue that people should work at the same company for a
life
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time
, while I believe that claim that people should
change
 their careers at least once in a
life
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time
. Some people insist that people should work
continueasly
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continuously
continually
 at the same job for a long
time
 because they can have deep knowledge and skills in
this
 field. Unlike changing their
career
, people can focus
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one specific target and experience in the same object.
For instance
, doctors can acquire skills through surgery in many cases
as a result
, they can contribute to
treat
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 future patients who suffer from
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same
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some
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 physical issues.
In addition
, working
at
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 the same environment have less stress level for workers. When people
change
 their jobs, they need to learn from the beginning and it
budern
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burden
 for many workers to adjust
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ew working situation.
However
, I believe that people should
change
 their
career
 since they can widen their perspective. When people
change
 the type of occupation, they meet new coworkers and experience new tasks, bringing them different values.
Furthermore
, people can find what they want to do clearly. Since most people
change
 their
career
 to improve their working environment, they can find
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ew target which they want to achieve. Take an example for engineering,
this
 job requires workers extra hours working, and scarify their private
time
, but once they
change
 their
career
 to a farmer, they can realize the beauty of
the
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nature and reconsider their free
time
. In conclusion, while it is true that people should work in the same place in their
life
 period, I believe that they should
change
 their job to gain
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ew perspective and find
b
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etter quality of
life
.
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