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Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Movie actors and musicians may earn
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assive amount of money while residing in
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uxurious environment , but most of them are living
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iserable
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 . In my opinion , celebrities spend
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 with their colleagues and family members quite well.
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, they have to limit socializing with people owing to security reasons. Some people believe that celebrities earn huge compensation for their
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they spend
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nhappy
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 because they pass most of the time doing
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 and their shooting schedule is quite busy.
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 , they have to perform on some events on special
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ack of time for their family and loved ones.
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, the salary that they get from the
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 is immense , and they have various kind of luxury items ,
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, branded cars and bungalows .
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 , some people think that being unhappy is the cost that they pay for their popularity all over the world. There are few arguments regarding
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, due to their famous personality they cannot go outside of their house without security , and they can't visit the recreational places
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 ,they have been accused of taking drugs in several reports which demonstrate their loneliness and depressiveness. In conclusion, most of the celebrities are living their
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 working desperately .
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,there are few actors who have maintained
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