It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
technology
is flourishing leaps and bounds in all sectors. It is said that because of the advancement in
technology
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raditional values of the country is being lost.
Moreover
, it is argued by some individuals that both these cannot go hand in hand. I partly agree with
this
notion because
technology
is incompatible with the culture in urban areas ,but it is different in rural sectors.
To begin
with, in cities with the influx of the internet and electronic devices life has become easier and convenient . In a large scale, people have adapted the western culture, and they are trying to avoid the past customs.
Similarly
,in the past when someone feels blue they prefer to share it with their family or friends, but nowadays they spend their spare time surfing through the internet
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and by playing online games.
Moreover
, everything has changed materialistic, and people are not valuing
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life. As an example, though people witness some crime on roads, they have forgotten the human tendency to help others
instead
they try to capture selfies and photos to post on media.
However
, it is not the case in rural areas. Advances in
technology
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compatible with traditions in many ways.
Firstly
, certain skills
such
as pottery, embroidery are still encouraged among rural people only through online platforms.
Secondly
, in the field of agriculture,
technology
helps farmers to use a variety of machineries to harvest at a fast pace.
For instance
, in an article published in The Hindu magazine stated that
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5% increase in yielding after the usage of advanced tillers.
Lastly
, certain marriage rituals are still maintained in the
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but in a colourful manner with photographic techniques.
Subsequently
,
technology
helps them to upgrade
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knowledge in many sectors. In conclusion, though some people argue that
technology
cannot be in harmony with cultures, I partially agree to
this
because in some cases there
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loss
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of traditions like in urban society ,
however
, it is not the case in rural sectors where traditions are still preserved despite the advancements in
technology
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • advancement
  • globalization
  • dilutes
  • traditional cultures
  • social media
  • blending of cultures
  • preservation
  • platforms
  • adaptability
  • technological adaptations
  • uphold
  • consequence
  • integrate
  • cultural frameworks
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