An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages

Many folks are purchasing via
i
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nternet what they require.
This
essay will discuss the useful aspects of buying in online and
also
describe the drawbacks of purchasing via
e
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an
the

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lectronic system. One of the positives of buying goods via
i
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the

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nternet is to save
their
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apply

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time
. We are now living in a digital era. Many
task
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tasks

The singular countable noun task follows the quantifier Many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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have
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has

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to do in a very short
time
. The world is bigger but it is task is getting very faster. Not only that it
consume
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consumes

The verb consume does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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the period but
also
it can save
the
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them

The word the doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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money at the same
time
. Another advantage, if something is purchased, one must go to the shop if there is no
internet
system.
For instance
, buying a shirt we have to fix where we have to go and how we have to arrive
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at
in

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that shop. Using
i
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the

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nternet it shows us about the image of these clothes and
also
display
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displays

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the prices which save our conveyance cost and period. As a consequence, multiple tasks would be done in a very short
time
.
On the contrary
, it is not possible to detect the quality of clothes as online marketing cannot show the originality of the goods.
Firstly
,
i
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nternet can only show the price
therefore
, it would not be possible to intercede any worth.
Secondly
, it shows
o
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the

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nly
i
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the

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mage of the substances and
as a result
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,

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it cannot state the actual quality of the goods.
For example
, if somebody wants to purchase a jacket it would not be possible to spot the exact colour because there is a variation of
i
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the
an

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mage in the online method which would occur trouble for the customers. In conclusion, purchasing online is a very effective side for people to fashion their lives faster.
However
, to buy actual materials there
is
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are

The singular verb form is does not seem to agree with the plural subject no alternative options of going to the market physically. Consider changing the verb form.

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no alternative options
of
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for

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going to the market physically.
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