Higher education could be funded in three ways. All costs paid by government, all costs paid by students or students paying all costs through a government loan. What are the advantages of these choices?

Education
plays an important role in life.
However
,
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graduation is being difficult because of financial problems.
Thus
, there are few ways that could be done to pay fees
such
as costs paid by
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overnment and students paying fees by
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overnment loan.
This
essay will analyze the advantages of all three arguments in detail.
Firstly
, if all cost paid by
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overnment, the people who
belongs
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to
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ackward society will get relief and they can easily complete their
education
.
Secondly
, fees are very high for some courses and if
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dministration will take
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responsibility
then
people can spend their money on other curricular activities like sports, music and art.
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, parents
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money their whole life to give their child a quality
education
so if the governing body initiate
then
students can use these funds for their future
In addition
, some people take
government
loan to fulfil
education
expenses.
Moreover
,
this
system is greatly
helful
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for students who are looking for
further
education
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abroad as it is the most expensive and individuals could not afford by their own. For illustration, in India,
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overnment is providing loan to every student on less interest and generally students have to pay back to
government
after completing their graduation so it gets easy for them to give funds back to
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overnment. In conclusion, all three choices have their own merits and they are certainly helpful for students.
Hence
, the nation should provide
this
kind of choices to them so it will get easy for them to
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higher
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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