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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.* *To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement*

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #*to #statement*
EDITED It is argued by some persons that in the coming years, everyone will prefer online sources of reading
to
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 hard copy materials for it will enable them to read all they want without
cost
. In my opinion, I strongly support
this
 view because of the convenience and
cost effectiveness
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 of electronic media. Digital media has made life much easier and comfortable. With the existence of mobile phone and other tablet devices, one can conveniently access a lot of
information
any where
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 and at
anytime
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 without having to be carrying around bulky and heavy hard copy materials.
For instance
, in a recent survey conducted by the national ICT, it was discovered that over 80% of students in West African institutions no longer carry heavy bags and books to school but rely solely on ebooks.
Hence
, the easy accessibility of digital media gives it an edge over hardcopy materials.
Furthermore
, electronic media is cheaper as it can always be accessed at a reduced
cost
 requiring only data, a good internet connection and power supply, unlike printed materials which take into consideration the
cost
 of printing, paper and colour.
For example
, children are being encouraged towards digital media due to the fact that it is less expensive for
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parents when trying to entertain their kids.
Therefore
, digital media is less costly when it comes to accessing
information
 compared to print media. In conclusion, it is noteworthy that soon, nobody will rely on hard copy materials as they will opt to access any
information
 they want from digital devices, since they are less costly and easy to carry around thereby depreciating the print media sector in the long run. I
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therefore
 recommend that young ones be exposed to digital sources of
information
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 an early age by installing computers in our homes and schools.
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