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Some people think that Children who spend a lot of time reading children’s story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. (To what extent do you agree?)

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Several people believe that children should do activities that they can improve their skills because other people think that kids who read
storybooks
 a
lot
 are wasting their
time
. From my point of view, I fully disagree that reading books are wasted children's
time
. Around the world, children love to read and listen
about
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 children's stories, so they always spend their
time
 on
storybooks
.
Moreover
, some people think that reading
storybooks
 are wasted kid's
time
 because they spend a
lot
 of
time
 on books, and they do not want to do anything else.
For example
, at school, students should have a
lot
 of homework to do at home, but when they read books all the
time
, they will not do homework and their teachers will punish them because they do not finish their homework.
On the other hand
, more and more people argue that reading books are not wasted children's
time
 because in
storybooks
 are many benefits and knowledge.
For example
, children who spend
time
 to read books. Books have a
lot
 of knowledge
such
 as culture and international food.
Moreover
, reading comic books are made people have a good concentration, and it is a good result because if they can read books for
l
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ong
time
, they will do other things for a long
time
 too
such
 as learning, listening and sitting. To sum up, people say reading
storybooks
 are wasted a
lot
 of
time
 for kids. While others think that kids should do other activities except reading books and I strongly disagree that books are not wasted their
time
.
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