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Some high schools have a requirement that students must complete a certain amount of volunteer work in order to graduate. What do you think about this type of requirement? Give details to support your opinion.

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It is a prerequisite in several high schools that candidates must finish a definite number of unpaid
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 to achieve graduation.
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, I would argue that, while it is helpful, it should remain a students’ choice. One of the most important benefits of the community
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 for high school students is that it prepares them for the
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.
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 is because it provides them with an opportunity to
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-hand experience the problems of the real world.
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, if a student involves himself/herself with voluntarily teaching classes for underprivileged people, he/she might be able to become a better teacher in
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 by examining the needs of their audience.
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, they usually become well equipped for
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 challenges.
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, they might struggle at beginning of their career if they do not have the relevant expertise.
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, it is vital that
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 should not be made compulsory to fix the number of volunteering hours for course completion as
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 may breed resentment among them. The reason for
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 is that people are often naturally averse to doing anything which is imposed upon them, especially without reward. As a consequence, they might resist participating in
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 activities going forward.
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, if they are paid for their
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, it might produce a feeling of being valued and satisfaction in them. In conclusion,
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 voluntary work at high school may carry the benefit of improved
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 prospects, I think it should not be made mandatory as
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 may foster the negativity towards
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 tasks.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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