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Fast food replacing traditional food causing negative impact on families.

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foodstuff has always been an integral part of the culture and constitutes a major element of cultural identity. Traditional foods have undergone
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volution of different degrees throughout the years to acquire the current state. Recent years fast
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 has taken a place in the diet of the common man and its proportion in daily diet and frequency of consumption is increasing rapidly. Convenience, addiction to some extent, and the feeling of being contemporary are the main motives which drive
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 behaviour of preferring fast
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 to traditional
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 among families and societies. Compared to the traditional foodstuff fast
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 definitely lacks health benefits. Traditional foods have evolved based on the availability of ingredients, climate, economic conditions, and the specific nutritional requirements for people who live in a particular geographical location.
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,people who live in cold regions need
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 high amount of proteins compared to the people who live in tropical regions. Whereas fast
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 is
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 followed one fit for all approach. It is conclusive that traditional
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 is better than fast
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 from a health perspective.
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 replacement of traditional
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 by fast
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 has a significant adverse impact on both families and societies.
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