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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

#people #idea #schools #person #parent #skills
In our days there are so many ideas come to school. One of them is
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each every young boys and
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 to be a laky dad and mom. In my opinion
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It is
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ery good method, to take important skills. Sometimes young persons don’t see good examples
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 their homes.
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many families are without one parent. I think it is
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ig problem for children A school may give skills to children which they can”t take at homes. I know two boys who have lessons about
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 topic. They showed me that they have different skills
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a good parent.
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are for your wife and children and many other things. I think
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 to be a good
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parent
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