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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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It is argued if the increasing number of online shopping may close all stores in towns and cities.
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 essay totally disagrees with
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 idea because many individuals are extremely precautious and like to carefully inspect the
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 that they are going to buy, and many times
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 needs to purchase something and have it in hands as quick as possible.
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,
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 reason why I do not believe that all shops are going to close due to the growth of online sells is that some costumers prefer to buy at the physical stores. Many individuals have the need of having a close look at the
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 before buying it in order to avoid
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regretting the purchase afterwards. To illustrate, my mother told me that she would never buy online again because she bought a mattress online and when it was delivered she found out that it was very uncomfortable.
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, sometimes the person needs
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product
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. There are many occasions that can lead to
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 to need to buy a
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 in a short period of time, and the biggest disadvantage of the online selling in comparison with any physical store is the delivery time.
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, a person who loses their computer and needs it to work will not be able to buy a new
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 online and wait for it to be delivered, since they need it for the
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 day, so the solution is to buy in a local shop. To conclude, I reaffirm my opinion that the increasing number of online sells will not result in the closure of all stores in town and cities because some people prefer to check the
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 before buying it and sometimes individuals have urgent needs that can not be solved online.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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