Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extent do you agree ?

Museums are the most famous places to learn about
history
and culture but, we can
also
find most of the information
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nternet. I partially agree with
this
point because both browsing and museums play an equal role
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the study of
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ast and way of people lived.
Therefore
, the following paragraphs will discuss these points.
Firstly
, in current days internet is mostly used by all the people and its a
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so, people can easily access to any particular topics. By using the
nternet
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internet
you can just sit in your home and can get the information about the
history
and the culture through the world, nowadays people are very busy with there schedules they will not have time to visit places so, we can save the information and go through it
when ever
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you get free time. If you use Google to search about the
istory
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history
we can get different versions on it and how different people explained about them in there way and you can read them in your comfortable languages.
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, while
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am reading a book I saw a topic about Hitler and his rules during his times and
i
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wanted to know more deeply about that since,
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can not go to Germany to know about him so, I can use google and search about his
history
.
Secondly
, it is not only important to just read about
history
but
also
sometimes it is important to watch the historical places and things they used in those times. By visiting museums
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we can see the real art and cultures how they used to live and survive in those days and we can
also
see their lifestyles and kind of food they and weapons they use. It is better to visit museums when it is possible and
this
will help present generations to know about the past and cultures of their particular country or religions they can enjoy and will get excited by watching those things.
For example
,
i
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took one of my brother's son to the
useum
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museum
back in my country he was so excited and learned a lot of things by looking at the art and sculpture. To conclude,
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would suggest that both internet and museum are important to learn about
history
and cultures and both of them have their own benefits in current generations.
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