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scientific research should be funded by government rather than commercial organisation to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#research #government #organisation
Nevertheless
, in
this
 globalisation era, scientific
research
 plays a pivotal role to develop the nation and advancement in scientific
research
 has changed the complete scenario of the world. A certain segment of the society believes that funding for scientific
research
 should be done by the national authorities. Whilst, others perception is that the commercial sector should take responsibility expenditure of scientific
research
. I agree with the former statement. I would like to explicate about it into the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
 with, there are myriad reasons that only the
government
 should raise the fund for scientific
research
.
First
 and the foremost reason is that the
government
 collected heavy taxes from individuals of the nation
then
 they can utilise that fund or save for scientific
research
.
In addition
 to
this
 quarterly revenue is
also
 collected by the central
government
 from state
government
 and from
this
 collection of revenue the
government
 can spend the required amount of money for improvement in scientific researcher.
Furthermore
, another reason funded by the
government
 for scientific
research
 is that commercial organisation do not have only responsibility to manage the office and give salary to employees and provide good infrastructure but
also
 the responsibility on their shoulder is family's responsibilities.
Hence
, due to limited sources of profit commercial sector cannot provide expenditure for scientific
research
. To conclude, the development of the country
also
 depends upon scientific
research
.
Although
,
government
 high have huge saving money,
however
,there are other unflourish sectors in which wealth is needed. If steps are taken by both the commercial sector as well as national authorities we would be seen fruitful results in scientific
research
.
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