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the use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now, the face to face
interaction
 is replaced by social media application.
This
 case has some advantages because people can communicate with the other anywhere and everywhere.
On the other hand
,
interaction
 using social media
also
 gives a benefit in
price
 because the people only pay an internet service without considering their finance to buy a ticket.
However
, replacing real
interaction
 has a
disadvantage
 of
interaction
 quality. In
this
 century, there are many social media which help people to communicate, so people can call their friends anywhere and everywhere.
For example
, people can make a virtual meeting
although
 the members of meeting live in foreign countries which have a time difference. The other benefit of using social media is the cheap
price
 of
interaction
 because people must not buy a transportation ticket, but they only have to buy internet service.
For instance
, the people who live in America can do discussion with their friend in Europe without using a transportation service which has a high
price
, but they only need to buy a smartphone.
Although
 using media social has some benefit, there is a
disadvantage
. The
disadvantage
 is the poor quality of
interaction
 because people can get a real touch from the other. Case in
this
 point, the children will not have a good bonding with their parents when they only see from a smartphone, because the children do not know about the parent's smells and the skin of their parents. To sum up, communication using social media can help the people do cooperation anywhere and everywhere and they must not buy a high
price
 of transportation ticket, but
this
 type of communication has a
disadvantage
 in the quality of communication.
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