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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society?

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By and large, the number of
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 enrolled in a course related to scientific fields in university has declined in most parts of the world.
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 subjects have become less popular among undergraduates and
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society. It is commonly acknowledged that scientific studies are considerably more complexed and difficult than any other subjects which
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 years of extensive study to obtain a degree.
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, in order to become a qualified doctor,
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 have to complete a 6-year medical program which requires a great deal of effort and patience.
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 that only intelligent and capable
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 could accomplish studies in
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 field. For
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 are inevitably discouraged from taking
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 courses. As a consequence of fewer
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 enrolled in
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 classes, there will be a shortage of professionals in scientific fields
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 as healthcare workers. One important issue is that the imbalance of doctor to patient ratio.
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, providing that there is only one doctor taking responsibility to take care of a hundred patients per day, treatment quality and outcomes will be below
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cceptable standard.
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,
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 unavoidably has a detrimental effect on people’s health. In conclusion, there are fewer and fewer
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 take scientific courses these days.
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 is far more complicated and difficult than any other subjects. And
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 to a shortage of healthcare workers and has
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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