Most people believe that stricter punishment should be given for traffic offences. To what extent do you agree?

It is widely considered that committing traffic offences should be highly punishable and people violating
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rules should be penalized. In the discussion
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decision of discipling
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on transportation rules. I would want to throw
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light on how lenient ordinance could lead to
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recent days,
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does not have
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irm set of
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irective on the carriage by
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,
accidents
have been quite common. The
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are flooded with information about
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as well as the "Hit and run" cases. There is no strict action taken in most of the scenarios. Depends on the kind of offence To conclude,
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