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Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that humans should put efforts to save all wild
animals
, while others are of the opinion that only selected
animals
 should be protected.
This
 essay agrees that every wild animal needs to be saved and it will be justified in the following paragraphs along with the discussion of both the views. The growing number of bodies are concerned about endangered
animals
. Some of the
fauna
 have already become extinct while others are on the verge of
extinction
. Every
fauna
 has
its
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 crucial role in the ecological cycle and loss of one would surely have an impact on the others.
For example
, studies show that when 'Doda' became extinct in early 18th century, few of the plants including some
animals
 became endangered within 30-40 years of
extinction
 of 'Doda' because of their interdependence.
Hence
, every
fauna
 needs to be protected.
On the contrary
, because of the enormous expenditure over the various programs run by the governments to save endangered
animals
, numerous people have suggested that only the
animals
 with a significant role in our ecological system should be saved from
extinction
.
However
,
this
 is non-acceptable, as even if any of the wild creatures do not have a significance in people's lives, the loss of gene diversity would be permanent and it will be irreversible damage.
For instance
, every creature has been gifted by nature a set of genes which are unique and with the loss of that animal those genetic materials would
also
 be lost. To conclude,
although
 the cost of preserving every animal may be on the extreme side, the preservation of every
fauna
 is necessary because of their crucial role in our ecological system.
Moreover
, they should be protected to preserve their unique genetic material which
otherwise
 would
also
 get lost along with their
extinction
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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