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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Friendship
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 is an Imperative part of the journey of a human being. Some
people
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 believe that having
friends
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 of equal opinions is better, while others believe in having their pals who sometimes don't agree with them. In my
opinion
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, it is important to have our
friends
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 who
supports
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 our
opinion
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 and sometimes disagree with us. When two
people
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 bond with each other, irrespective of their gender we say a
friendship
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 is blooming in between them. The bond is a result of two irrefutable facts.
Firstly
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, we always like
w
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it
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hen we have someone who is advocating the same thought or an
idea
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.
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, in my college project
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,
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we as a group had to provide an
idea
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 on which the project will be implemented, and when
i
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I
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 presented the
idea
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, my friend
john
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John
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 was advocating on the same
idea
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 which made me feel really good as my
idea
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 was appreciated.
Secondly
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, there
has
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have
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 to be common interests between two human beings. To illustrate, my
friendship
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 with john blossomed, when offered to drive me home on our
first
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 day in college, I came to know he is a huge football and baseball fanatic, and I sharing the same interest really helped in connecting with him.
As a result
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, we can say that having
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riend who has accepts your
opinion
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 and sharing
s
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the
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ame interest will surely
helps
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help
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 in having a good conversation.
Conversely
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, having all your
friends
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 of the same
opinion
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doesnt
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doesn't
 give the true picture of life.
Firstly
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, there are always different aspects of looking at things and everyone having the same
idea
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 may sometimes put us in a position from where we cannot get a solution
from
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apply
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.
For example
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, in my workplace,
i
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I
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 had put an
idea
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 to my boss, and he
being
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is
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 a proponent of the same
idea
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 implemented the same in the workplace. My other
collegue
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colleague
 had a different
idea
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 which he
didnt
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didn't
 like as he was too much overwhelmed by my
idea
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, and ultimately my
idea
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 was not good and the project failed. Later, my superior followed the
idea
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 of my subordinate and it was very much successful.
In other words
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, what I mean to say is having a single
idea
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 and looking for
friends
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 who
supports
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support
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 the same, constraints our thoughts which may often prove wrong. To conclude, we cannot
chose
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choose
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 between
friendship
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 based on
people
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 who
supports
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support
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 our
opinion
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.
However
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its
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it's
it is
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 always
neccessary
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necessary
 for
people
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 sharing common interest and thoughts for
friendship
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 to
florish
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flourish
,
however
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 having
friends
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 who sometimes disagree with us is
also
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 imperative as it gives us
a different aspects
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different aspects
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 of looking things. In my
opinion
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,
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the best choice is to have
friends
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 who
advocates
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advocate
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 our
opinion
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 and sometimes disagree with the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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