IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

Write about the following topic: Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

#topic #group #students #classroom #home #minutes
Whether studying with peers in
class
 benefits
students
 more or learning online at
home
 provides more advantages to
students
 is controversial worldwide. Some people
support
 that traditional
study
 in
class
benefit
Change the verb form
benefits
show examples
 the
learners
becauseof
Correct your spelling
because of
 the environment at
school
, regular schedules and
teachers
' guidance. I personally totally agree with these people. Traditional studying in
class
 often provides a quiet environment for
students
 to learn which definitely benefits the
learners
.
Moreover
, sitting in the classroom with a group of peers often forces the
learners
 to learn by the influence of peer pressure, and
also
 assists
learners
' in paying attention to their lectures.
However
, studying online alone at
home
 may be distracted by their family member if
students
 do not have a
uiet
Correct your spelling
quiet
 room for them to
study
 online. Nowadays,
learners
 are easy to waste their time online when they surf the Internet. Traditional classrooms in
school
 provide
b
Add an article
a
show examples
etter learning environment for
students
, and
therefore
, I
support
students
 should learn at
school
.
In addition
,
t
Add an article
a
show examples
raditional
study
 in
school
also
 assists
students
 in nurturing basic life skills
such
 as be punctual, following
school
 policies, and interpersonal skills. I personally definitely
support
this
 view and believe traditional earning in
class
 may benefit the majority of
students
. Online
learners
 at
home
 lack the real experience at
school
 and often have difficult to interact with other
students
 who
also
 enrol in the same course. Take me as
an
Change the article
a
show examples
xample
Correct your spelling
example
. I studied my English in
class
 in Toronto ten years ago, and a couple of my classmates eventually have become my friend in Canada for the past ten years.
However
, in 2019, I took an online English
class
, but it was difficult for me to keep in contact with anyone in
an
Change the article
a
show examples
nline
Correct your spelling
online
class
.
Finally
,
t
Add an article
a
show examples
raditional
study
 in
class
 benefits
students
 because of their reachers who present in
class
.
Teachers
 or lecturers often guide their
learners
 and make sure all their
learners
 not be left behind easily in
class
.
Students
also
 have opportunities to ask questions face to face until they have the solution.
Teachers
 in
class
 are easy to make sure that their
students
 pay attention to listen
Add the preposition
to
show examples
totheir
Correct your spelling
to their
 lectures and
study
 hard.
On the other hand
, learning online at
home
 lacks the
support
 from their
teachers
 at
a
Change the article
an
show examples
ertain
Correct your spelling
certain
 level, and
learners
 are easy to be distracted to spend time surfing the Internet
instead
 of studying their courses. I personally believe that online
study
also
 brings negative impacts to some
learners
. In conclusion, traditional
study
 and online learning both have upsides and downsides to their
students
 basing on
students
' grades or personal conditions. I believe that traditional
study
 in
class
 remains the mainstream for future education worldwide.
Submitted by busybee1693 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: