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Write about the following topic: Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

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benefits
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students
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 more or learning online at
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 provides more advantages to
students
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 is controversial worldwide. Some people
support
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 that traditional
study
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class
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benefits
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 the
learners
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 because of the environment at
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, regular schedules and
teachers
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' guidance. I personally totally agree with these people. Traditional studying in
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 often provides a quiet environment for
students
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 to learn which definitely
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 the
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, sitting in the classroom with a group of peers often forces the
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 to learn by the influence of peer pressure, and
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' in paying attention to their lectures.
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, studying online alone at
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 may be distracted by their family member if
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 online. Nowadays,
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 are easy to waste their time online when they surf the Internet. Traditional classrooms in
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also
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 in nurturing basic life skills
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 policies, and interpersonal skills. I personally definitely
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 may benefit the majority of
students
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. Online
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 at
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 lack the real experience at
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 and often have difficult to interact with other
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 who
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 example. I studied my English in
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 in Toronto ten years ago, and a couple of my classmates eventually have become my friend in Canada for the past ten years.
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, in 2019, I took an online English
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, but it was difficult for me to keep in contact with anyone in
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benefits
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students
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 because of their reachers who present in
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.
Teachers
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 or lecturers often guide their
learners
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 and make sure all their
learners
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 not be left behind easily in
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.
Students
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 have opportunities to ask questions face to face until they have the solution.
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 in
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 are easy to make sure that their
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 pay attention to listen
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 their lectures and
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, learning online at
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 from their
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 at
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 certain level, and
learners
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 are easy to be distracted to spend time surfing the Internet
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 of studying their courses. I personally believe that online
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 brings negative impacts to some
learners
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. In conclusion, traditional
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 and online learning both have upsides and downsides to their
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 basing on
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' grades or personal conditions. I believe that traditional
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 in
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 remains the mainstream for future education worldwide.
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