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Some people think that national sports teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. However, others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (e.g. Business, scholarship, etc.). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most countries provide monetary help to their sportspersons and national teams when they play for the country. Some believe that financial funding should not be given by governments, rather other means of sponsorship
such
 as business and scholarships should be the source of funding.
However
, I partially disagree with
this
 viewpoint and
this
 essay provides arguments in favour of my opinion after discussing both sides of the argument. It is true that the government-sponsored monetary funding to
sports
 entities puts a strain on the federal finances and many people argue that the
sports
 funds can be better utilized to help other public sectors
such
 as health & education.
Also
,
sports
 and recreational activities are considered a personal choice by many as opposed to a public matter.
Therefore
, it may seem reasonable that the countries should not spend on providing for sportspersons and teams who play for them. I,
however
, partially disagree with
this
 thought because world
sports
 domination is a matter of pride for any nation and its people, and
hence
 it is but natural to provide financial aid to
sports
 as they help promote the nation on the world
sports
 map. Looking at other sources of sponsorship
also
 may not prove to be a fruitful idea as funding by businesses and other grants may not be motivated by the same national interest and
instead
, can be used to promote individual business interests and
such
.
Furthermore
, mostly non-government grants do not have permanence guaranteed and can be provided on a year-to-year basis.
Sports
, unlike education, require long term preparation and continued financial support before results can be observed. In
such
 cases, having long term vision and stable funding from federal sources can be more beneficial for both the sportspersons and organizers. I conclusion, while it is clear that businesses and other sources should be encouraged to sponsor
sports
, it is primarily the governments who should be providing budgetary assistance to the national teams and athletes.
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